learner response

Learner Response: 

My word count is 625 that could be improved 

 My news industry paragraph was the best because it clearly identifies the advantages and disadvantages of the internet on the news industries 

 In my opinion, I don't think that any of my paragraphs are weak as they all have a clear point and give a clear understanding of the reader 

Redraft:

Original; another industry that has been impacted by the development of the internet is the film and TV industry. Companies such as Netflix and Amazon Prime Video have allowed the public to watch and stream movies and videos from an affordable price, meaning that the public would be more likely to use these websites/applications. 

New; the internet has given the audience opportunities to explore new ways to watch and enjoy the programmes, movies and series that they love the most. Streaming has become popular among our generation as it is more convenient and in some ways more affordable.